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again grasshopper get free
jak

Saintly graces glimmer spaces
 1
I am able to get a little height today
 2
reaction turning light today but no fights today Sunday, I play the fool mission fall scraping court
 3
j[g]est[u]er[re], a festering brain aimed for the sun.
 4
 
 
This relationship is over ninety-three million miles away from one
 5
not done not won, not undone not unwon
 6
not uncommon that its time is [w]on[e]
 7
not understood by the deeds it's done
 8
not understated when its rhyme is numb
 9
not undetected when its shades get on
 10
not unprotected from the blaze of guns
 11
not underzealous for the beams they come
 12
not unheard of to be gunning for the sun.
 13
 
 
It blinds one, it finds one hectic, it's a makeshift dialectic
 14
dot to dot did I ask you to connect it?
 15
I meant to.
 16
These spots are ancient Hindu
 17
outside waiting to get in you
 18
can't wait to offend you
 19
no need to comprehend you any farther than the sun you bend to
 20
like a flower sucking power
 21
changing places on the hour
 22
making facial movements sour.
 23
 
 
Freckled brow or mad exposure
 24
skin cancer gets you closer
 25
risks your closure.
 26
It grows your anti-kosher ill from free will
 27
like road kill or swil
 28
skin encapsulated pill we call ego
 29
it's the only way we know.
 30
 
 
Friend and foe
 31
I know
 32
I go
 33
loco
 34
-motion
 35
where's your potion?
 36
spf cream lotion
 37
protect your notions from emotions.
 38
 
 
Saintly graces glimmer spaces
 39
I am able to get a little height today
 40
let's fight today - Monday. . . .
 41

5 Jul 04

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i enjoyed this but it's kind of annoying to scan.  why not break the lines?
 — unknown

yes, possibly. thanks for the observation.
 — jak

now it has some line breaks . . . . any better?
 — jak

Quite interesting...i like the second stanza-ws
 — WildSymphony

Hmmm...this sounds like it would be a good song, but the flow and (lack of) rhythm of it throws me off a little, and it doesn't seem to be useful to the meaning of the poem, which is rather cryptic.  Interesting rhyme scheme though.
 — pearljammer

i liked it ,esp the lines

"It blinds one, it finds one hectic, it's a makeshift dialectic  14
dot to dot did I ask you to connect it?  15
I meant to. "

&
"not done not won, not undone not unwon  6

not understood by the deeds it's done "

v.original,have you been reading a bit of berryman.
 — unknown

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