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the air sweat before it rains
gnormal

our humid eyes
 1
calm as clouds
 2
rainy season and still
 3
swollen smile
 4
four peso pedicab
 5
takes me one mile
 6
 
 
why did he
 7
brake for me
 8
a banana leaf wider than my head
 9
"for you" he said
 10
"the rain is coming"
 11
and i
 12
smi
 13
led
 14

a good memory from the philippines

8 Jun 04

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nice. the title is so good i'd like to hang it on my wall or wear it taped to my inner thigh all day.
 — hank

this is amazung! xaimphlab would be proudness...
 — unknown

Nice.
'calm as clouds', thats will be in my head for a while.
I like the ending alot too.
 — Bruce

it's the kinda poem i can read atleat once a day! love it!
 — Odin

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