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Made in The Shade
gnormal

When good plants and animals
 1
reach the end of their life
 2
and are just about to expire,
 3
they concentrate hopefully,
 4
 
 
"Talking monkey
 5
talking monkey
 6
talking monkey.
 7
Please, please, please.
 8
Talking monkey
 9
talking monkey
 10
talking monkey..."
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4 Feb 02

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they want to be reincarnated like us?
 — unknown

I want to like your poetry, but it's just too hard for me to understand. The first four lines are promising, but I don't understand the "Talking Monkey" bit at all.
 — unknown

ITV Digital itv digital.
Nice one, gnorm.
 — unknown

i completely missed it the first time.
second time, nice.
i'd just drop the "repeating" completely.
 — jade

nice one
 — unknown

I like this one alot.
-hogrot
 — hogrot

youre right jade.
i removed "repeating".
 — gnormal

karma was never so cleverly wrought. took me a second but i am dumb. excellent, original piece of work.
 — werkzeug

Hah, that's excellent.
 — Point5

WEIRD
 — NO

to the point. I like it.
 — Ananke

And stirred with a spade, and then it's good enough for any old maid.
 — unknown

Heh, very good indeed.
 — Moose

It took me a couple reads to completely understand, they are hoping to be reincarnated as humans, very funny and original.
 — unknown

YA DAM TYPING MONKEYS.
 — unknown

thats kinda weird there like no fun in that poem sorry i dont really like it!
 — unknown

I love line 4.  I don't get all your stuff, but when I do, I feel tremendous envy.
 — unknown

dont have notthing to say to ths awful thing
 — unknown

Ah. I get it. I really do. Humans are talking monkeys, correct? I can see why the good little plants and animals envy our long life spans.
 — OKcomputer

Oh. Reincarnation works too. :-D I was close.
 — OKcomputer

Wonderful... it goes well with coffee and pancakes. I can tell this will be an awesome day.
 — CrimsonStorm

Oh man, for some reason I kept reading 'money' instead of 'monkey', so I wasn't getting it, then I did, and I love it.
 — shadowskiss

I love. Love love love. It's so damn cute! ^_^
-wendz
 — unknown

I don't uderstand it reply to me and explain ok. always got balls to put it out though.
 — emo

EMO OWNS YOUR SOUL!
 — unknown

:)
 — unknown

An original concept and idea, you are indeed an innovative individual.  Keep up the good work!
 — unknown

i hate this poem.

-a good plant






:P
 — noodleman

good poem!

-talking monkey







:)
 — noodleman

lol, silly Noodles
 — unknown

Line 7 needs a period.
 — unknown

i'd rather be a good plant..
 — inutile

Hm... trippy the more you re-read.
 — unknown

Ridiculous.  You slam my well crafted verse, but you are not even a poet, so I laugh, as your words are laughable.
 — ThomasGoss

huh?
 — unknown

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