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lightning
unknown

whenever
 1
forked veins
 2
flashed under
 3
tense scalp
 4
office staff
 5
ran for
 6
cover.
 7

2 Aug 07


(define the words in this poem)



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the first four lines are quite brilliant, but the last three lines just make it corny.....that first image is fantastic, now you just have put the energy into a poem that can hold it.
 — joshcoops

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