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Travels (revised)
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I had a map in younger days, filled
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with points and plots. To begin, I’d put in pins
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to chart out all my stops.
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My railpass has expired. Short courses
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are too steep. I try to buy the tickets
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but now they don’t come cheap.
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Pinpricks line my claims. The map’s got old
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with rot. I don’t have time to go again,
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to fill in all the dots.
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1 Aug 07

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This is cute and clever.  The rhyming seems almost accidental, which is nice for a change.  
 — Isabelle5

Thanks. Appreciate the visit.
 — unknown

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