god, you so remind me of bukowski |
unknown
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bukowski
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keeps me up
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nights
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will you
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help me
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with my
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writing?
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a fifteen year old
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platinum haired
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lady-poet
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from arizona
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emailed
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along with a photo
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of herself
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giving an orange pop-sickle
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a rough ride.
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honey,
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i emailed back:
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first off
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i can't even manage
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the incidentals
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of my own
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petty-larceny
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second off
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bukowski was an
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idiot
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he abandoned his
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wife and daughter
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bitched the same
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life is so hard tone
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while always doing
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what he wanted
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when he wanted.
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i'll tell you
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this:
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go read some
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raymond carver
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a little henry miller
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not too much
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get to know
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your grandparents
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as human beings
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before they die
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ziploc that sickle
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stash it in the freezer
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and hit me up
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in three years.
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15 Jul 07 |
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Comments:
AHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHHAHA...
— amaviena
this is the best thing i've read in ages. 10
— bowiegirl
I'm interested in your use of "pop-sickle."
it seemed clever...intended?
more realism...am I stalking you yet?
your particular writing style yet amuses me.
— amaviena
am,
bo,
thanks for reading.
justin.
— unknown
KNEW IT.
hey, justin,
I can pick you out even without the backslashes
and I've been here little more than a week.
Your voice is present, to say the least.
— amaviena
this is great, right on the money! The poem is good, the idea behind it even better.
— slancho
the wonderful thing about this poem is that it is written as if from the point of view of Bukowski, very gracefully and without cashing in on the usual metaphors associated with him. Well, there is a girl but she is by no means a glamorous one - and almost laughable with her lollipop. Great tone, a wonderful, original idea, and an advice to take to heart.
Good work, Justin, as always, very good work.
This one is to read over and over again when confronted with the omniscence of idols.
Kindly
Maria
— slancho
lines 24 > 33 reads properly like bukowski writing about bukowski
i do quite like the bukowskiesque rest :)
does try to capture the same 'life is so hard tone' very well
-Mong-
— Mongrol
maria,
mong,
thanks for reading.
justin.
— unknown
Awww.... this was a nice poem for my birthday. I loved it.
— aforbing
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