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god, you so remind me of bukowski
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bukowski
 1
keeps me up
 2
nights
 3
 
 
will you
 4
help me
 5
with my
 6
writing?
 7
 
 
a fifteen year old
 8
platinum haired
 9
lady-poet
 10
from arizona
 11
emailed
 12
along with a photo
 13
of herself
 14
giving an orange pop-sickle
 15
a rough ride.
 16
 
 
honey,
 17
i emailed back:
 18
 
 
first off
 19
i can't even manage
 20
the incidentals
 21
of my own
 22
petty-larceny
 23
 
 
second off
 24
bukowski was an
 25
idiot
 26
 
 
he abandoned his
 27
wife and daughter
 28
 
 
bitched the same
 29
life is so hard tone
 30
while always doing
 31
what he wanted
 32
when he wanted.
 33
 
 
i'll tell you
 34
this:
 35
 
 
go read some
 36
raymond carver
 37
a little henry miller
 38
not too much
 39
 
 
get to know
 40
your grandparents
 41
as human beings
 42
before they die
 43
 
 
ziploc that sickle
 44
stash it in the freezer
 45
and hit me up
 46
in three years.
 47

15 Jul 07

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AHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHHAHA...
 — amaviena

this is the best thing i've read in ages. 10
 — bowiegirl

I'm interested in your use of "pop-sickle."

it seemed clever...intended?
more realism...am I stalking you yet?

your particular writing style yet amuses me.
 — amaviena

am,
bo,

thanks for reading.

justin.
 — unknown

KNEW IT.
hey, justin,
I can pick you out even without the backslashes
and I've been here little more than a week.

Your voice is present, to say the least.
 — amaviena

this is great, right on the money!  The poem is good, the idea behind it even better.  
 — slancho

the wonderful thing about this poem is that it is written as if from the point of view of Bukowski, very gracefully and without cashing in on the usual metaphors associated with him.  Well, there is a girl but she is by no means a glamorous one - and almost laughable with her lollipop.  Great tone, a wonderful, original idea, and an advice to take to heart.

Good work, Justin, as always, very good work.
This one is to read over and over again when confronted with the omniscence of idols.

Kindly
Maria
 — slancho

lines 24 > 33 reads properly like bukowski writing about bukowski

i do quite like the bukowskiesque rest :)

does try to capture the same 'life is so hard tone' very well

-Mong-
 — Mongrol

maria,
mong,

thanks for reading.

justin.
 — unknown

Awww.... this was a nice poem for my birthday.  I loved it.
 — aforbing

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