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Solstice

First attempt at a poem in a few years, I know its not good but tell me what ya think.

What my eyes have seen,
 1
seen,but not heard
 2
heard,but not remembered,
 3
Remember the past
 4
the past becomes the future,
 5
The future is lost
 6
lost to us all,
 7
all but a few
 8
few stand tall and brave,
 9
Brave before a future
 10
a future unseen
 11
seen,and remembered,
 12
remember,and learn
 13
learn,from the past,
 14
Past, can change the future
 15
the future is today.
 16

14 Jul 07


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It is great. Maybe you should give all of the others here, who think they write poems, some lessons.
 — hairlessclam

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