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First attempt at a poem in a few years, I know its not good but tell me what ya think.

What my eyes have seen,
seen,but not heard
heard,but not remembered,
Remember the past
the past becomes the future,
The future is lost
lost to us all,
all but a few
few stand tall and brave,
Brave before a future
a future unseen
seen,and remembered,
remember,and learn
learn,from the past,
Past, can change the future
the future is today.

14 Jul 07

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It is great. Maybe you should give all of the others here, who think they write poems, some lessons.
 — hairlessclam

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