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The ending credits
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As the movie ends
 1
and the screen slowly fades
 2
into a tiny black atmosphere,
 3
I look upon
 4
each and every one of your faces
 5
and put on a slightly
 6
curious smirk.
 7
 
 
At the shocking
 8
frustrating
 9
and sleepy clogged up
 10
incongruent vibes
 11
all of you are producing.
 12

14 Jul 07


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commas in stanza two, perhaps?
 — amaviena

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