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heavy death things
SenorSin

its just a minor thing, we's all just minor pieces of shit lodged between the grass of life, one really heavy brick of life.
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When it gets too heavy, you die.
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Heavy death, like falling fast, really fast, like eagles going after rat flavored donuts, eagles dressed like cops flying through the air after a stereotype that lives strong on almost genetically through our blue jeans, hand-me-downs, thats all genes are, hand-me-downs, genetic material handed down. Handed. Hand jobs, handed down jobs thrown down a ladder made from the spines of tarantulas found under and beneath Sunday church benches preaching southern salvation through a ignorance of peace and a loving of danger men, danger men armed to the teeth with sharp teeth that protrude through the cheeks, cut and sliced with danger, smells of danger, reeks of danger, a dangerous stereotype of stereotyped indifference to a society built upon the theory that consumerisms basic building block is the teaching of the ethic of collecting things as a heathly, viable hobby.
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2 Jul 07

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I think I like this, but it needs to be broken down into verse, and not in pragrapgh form. Thats just me but I think it would help alot, and would open up lots of possiblity for word play.
 — Solstice

I do like this! I think it cuts right to the heart of things.  I especially like L3.1 and L3.2          & nbsp; 

It does take some work to get through it, but is worth the effort.  One thing I'm not sure about is the mixed metaphor for life in L1.
 — skinnyJon

read day dream its a short poem but it good
 — unknown

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