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Postcard from New Jersey
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Babies laugh on TV
 1
Mine seems to cries
 2
I do my best
 3
I just
 4
don't know why,
 5
 
 
Everything I do
 6
Is less than I want,
 7
working to hard
 8
all of them taunt,
 9
 
 
tomorrow will change
 10
everything
 11
no more dreaming
 12
much more doing
 13
 
 
gotta get this straight
 14
before the bend
 15
becomes a break
 16
 
 
Everything doesn't have to rhyme
 17
for it all to fit.
 18

2 Jul 07


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is it just me, or does the first part sound very similar to the chorus of Rise Against's song "Swing Life Away"?

-Leah.
 — EchoesRemain

I haven't heard the song or know the band, but I have deleted the first verse until I can hear it and edit if I need to.
 — Scud

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