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There are times for Magpies and times for Toucans
dustybottoms

I once asked to dance with a magpie.
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While dressed up, they are wonderful creatures;
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too bad they only see in black and white.
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I cannot show my colors and Roy is again lonesome.
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My wings, clipped, would flutter helplessly in a cage.
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My squawks for freedom came unanswered for days, weeks, months.
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Claws scratched bars, air struggled, my feathers rustled.
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Silence broke, like glass shattering during a sermon, preaching blasphemy into the ears of young magpies.
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The young toucan, exemplified in the gray sky, was unlike any creature.
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The world revolved around her; the sun cried-her beauty unfolded paralleling to none.
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Trees bowed down, the Helen of all the land.
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She set me free- an arrow of love penetrated deep into my breast.
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Rainbows were dull in color, envying her wings, shining in God's glory.
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Mother Nature needed her.
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The clouds needed her to dance upon them for her remaining days.
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The seas and country would not let me have her.
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The world would have ended.
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27 Jun 07

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I am not 100% pleased, but I need to get this out. I'm kind of in a writing hole. Luckily the hole is only knee deep.
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