poetry critical

online poetry workshop



2:23 am and drugs
Hatsumomo

my addictions, though
 1
external and killing me
 2
make me less empty
 3

haikus have a  lot to say, if only my words were more powerful.

26 Jun 07

Rated 8 (8) by 1 users.
Active (1): 8
Inactive (0):

(define the words in this poem)
(7 more poems by this author)



Add A Comment:
Enter the following text to post as unknown: captcha

Comments:

please read .

Haiku

Most popular definition, but there is more to haiku than meets the eye:

Haiku (also called nature or seasonal haiku) is an unrhymed Japanese verse consisting of three
unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables (5, 7, 5) or 17 syllables in all.  Haiku is usually
written in the present tense and focuses on nature (seasons).

The 5/7/5 rule was made up for school children to understand and learn this type of poetry.  
For an in depth description of Haiku, please visit the Shadow Poetry Haiku, Senryu, and Tanka
section.  There is much more to haiku than the made up 5/7/5 version.


Example #1:

Pink cherry blossoms
Cast shimmering reflections
On seas of Japan

Copyright © Andrea


Example #2:

salt-waves caress sand
tickling my toes and heart
in their short-spun wake

Copyright © 2002 Diana


Example #3:

warm soup in a bowl
letters of the alphabet
hang on the teaspoon
 — unknown

To The Unknown:
If you're saying this isn't a haiku because
it doesn't involve nature,
I pity you. For you will never be a true artist.

That said, the title is great. It establishes a dizzy atmosphere that mimics the intoxication of drugs effectively. These three lines are so desperate and shameless; I absolutely love it.
 — mixtapeboy

Recently Commented (expand)
0.463s