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Dorian Gray
LostWaves

Beautiful rows of dramatic sunflowers
 1
subtly line the cold brick wall
 2
clinging with every hope
 3
to their weak pathetic leaves
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hoping that someday
 5
someone will notice them,
 6
glance at them,
 7
and comment on their beauty
 8
the sincere brutal color
 9
of yellow that hurts the eyes
 10
and even the heart
 11
the perfectly round sculpted center
 12
which from brown seeds emanate
 13
rain finds home in the leafy green stem
 14
the slithers up the cement  
 15
and when dawn appears
 16
the jealous sun misses the chance
 17
to shine about
 18
the radiant quiet flowers
 19
that make life
 20
kind, gentle
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and everything under the sun
 22
worth living for
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which is why in the dark of night
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under the bracing moon glow
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love finds its form
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in the prolific wings
 27
of an ugly butterfly
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17 Jun 07


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wow. I really like this poem.
beautiful flow, great imagery. you paint a unique picture for the reader.
 — sparrow

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