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The Five second stare down
CheBourdain7

The light turned red.
 1
Suddenly the radio started
 2
to play  Sugar Ray's Every Morning.
 3
And there you are
 4
to my left,
 5
with your Honda Civic,
 6
as you caught me
 7
non chalantly jamming out
 8
to the most corniest
 9
yet catchiest song of the late 90's.
 10
A slight guilt and awkwardness
 11
is express in the subtlities
 12
of my face.
 13

1 Jun 07

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'Sugar Ray's Every Morning' need to be quoted.
L 8 = non chalantly - is one one word
L 12 = subtleties
 — trochee

L 8 = non chalantly - is *one* word

=) trochee
 — unknown

Great little snapshot of modern life. Love that song too. Line 8: nonchalantly is all the one word by the way. Why is five capitalised in the title? Anyway, love this poem (but why does it have to be a Honda Civic?!)
 — unknown

as endearing as a found poem. The mistakes enhanc e the traffic light scribble charm. Written at the wheel. Even the jumbled tenses are sweet.

natural. Don't polish this one up, please. Although you can correct the spelling errors, I suppose.

maybe include the colour of the car?
 — banditfemme

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