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angel?
pranav86

resolute
 1
i plaster more mud
 2
upon me
 3
hiding behind layers
 4
of grease
 5
 
 
i sit
 6
baking in the sun
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to escape
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the glare of your
 9
eyes
 10
 
 
let
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putrid smells reign
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on me to
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escape your
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rabid bites
 15
 
 
still you touch
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leaving me
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insolent
 18
into dust
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trodden upon
 20
 
 
shattered pieces
 21
of glass
 22
stuck with glue
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here is
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daddy's little girl
 25

31 May 07

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Gritty and well written, 'glue' could be replaced with a better word though.
 — unknown

thanks..
 — pranav86

Amazingly well written.
L7 baking has a cliche tone to it and I agree with the above about the word glue. this poem has a strong voice and invokes powerful emotion and imagery. Normally I dislike lack of punctuation but this really works. I would capitalise your "I" though cos it looks like typos the way it is now.
Apart from that, beautifully presented.
 — angrychick

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