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The sound of awkward silence
 1
in the car
 2
helps her recognize
 3
she is souls away
 4
                                  from him.
 5
 
 
Her eyes construing
 6
the color of his shirt,
 7
disembroiled tie
 8
and sleeves folded neatly;
 9
worries her, if she misread
 10
destiny's cue.
 11
 
 
The compromise of her feelings
 12
gets provoked
 13
with his office piffles,
 14
impending promotions
 15
and combing the hair
 16
whilst conversations.
 17
 
 
 
 
And she is compelled
 18
to long for the awkward silence again
 19
and think of the boy
 20
who likened her smile to:
 21
 
 
'a contagious yawn,
 22
realigning
 23
everyones gaze'
 24
 
 
and reassure herself
 25
she will be loved.
 26




Mehr:
A dowry (also known as trousseau) is a gift of money or valuables given by the bride's family to that of the groom to permit their marriage.

28 May 07


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nice. your typical voice but that is a good thing. your signature, really, typicality sounds like this isn't anything new. but this is. nice incorporation of definition at the end.
 — listen

i took too long to comment so it didn't work-
dammit!
I'll do it again maybe tomorrow, just wanted to say that I really liked this!
I have some suggestions for later,
thanks,
JEn
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i really like this.  pulled me in with the very first line - i literally came closer to the screen.
 — 1994

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