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Doppelganger
2CBurt

Subtle overwhelming
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of the world we witness,
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reviled by everything but that which we confess
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we know in times of weak,
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dark flux, joint changes felt
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beneath the
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way we speak.
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And at some point we melt
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together at the head with seamless
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skin, the only scarring where the dead great grey meets, two so
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well a-liked for being pretty on
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the surface of our tongues
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as we sing
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songs you like.
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Out of lace we made it;
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the holes were our starting
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point.  A hood to cover all our indiscretions
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for the good of every
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body we share sins with.
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Both our eyes
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are open;
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we see twice as many
 22
of our lies as yours and subtly
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we overwhelm each wave in fits of victory.
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We try to save ourselves. The life-vest
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will not fit us both, not
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around our
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four-lung chest,
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our two-faced neck, and not
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a hope to stay afloat
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forever, just a temporary post to gloat
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from 'til the scent sticks deep
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and we breathe permanence.
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25 May 07


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