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When Grandma Apple Blossom Visits, We Listen
GreenDreams

The old woman surprised me,
 1
shivering on my back step last winter,
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whiskers, hysterectomy and all.
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She seemed to take no notice of my naked mind
 4
and offered herself inside.
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I shuffled through excuses to remove her,
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cautious but obsessively curious,
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and merely came up with a shrug and a
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"Please sit down. Are you hungry?"
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She pushed past my labor
 10
and fiddled with the stove herself,
 11
muttering to her own ancestors
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about marjoram and mustard seed,
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then finished with a pinch of my own soul.
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I flinched, but couldn't recall why.
 15
 
 
She was righteous in her own way, of course,
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and had roses protruding
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from the backs of her ears.
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She noticed my stares, and chattered
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"They teach me knowledge,
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the kind you don't normally hear,
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understand?" then went about her business
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cleaning the pots
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and scouring my face for a witness.
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My eyes grasped on to every part of her.
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The ground pulled hard on the skin of her face,
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forming creases and caverns
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along her image.
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She could never be mistaken for any other,
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distinct fragrance and action emanated about her.
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That night was a vivid one,
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and it tugs on my memory even now
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as I recall her empty hands thrust in my face.
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"I do not ask, you see?"
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She smiled, wide and willing,
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then lay herself down at my feet.
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"I do not beg, you see?"
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Then she sang, shrill and reverberating the world,
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and I felt her spirit in my mind,
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soft like an early dream.
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'I only offer, you see?'
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I have never compared another to this moment,
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nor have I even cared to attempt the challenge.
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The woman left that next day,
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in a gathering of stars and apple blossoms
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billowing about her ancient head.
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I asked her to remain,
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and knew my voice was too eager to appease.
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But she gave a kind embrace in her place,
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granted a kiss on my crown,
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and spoke with an easy tongue.
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"I love you, young one.
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Remember that."
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And she was gone.
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Like a wilting violet
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or a lonely cloud in the sun's divine glory,
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she disappeared,
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whispering my name over her shoulder
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as she danced away
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with the vines and the fae.
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25 May 07


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awesome poem holla!
 — dustybottoms

I'll be back to bump this one up and when it falls off the board
 — unknown

thank you
 — GreenDreams

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