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The Lying Eyes part 1
jyce

This is the first of a trilogy. Here, our hero realises betrayal by the ones closest to him.
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Gather 'round my children
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and listen to a tale once lost
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of a man who knew deception
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until his mind it cost.
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Awakening one morning,
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though not so he thought,
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began the visions of liars
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in the people that he sought.
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Their faces would crack open
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and did manifest were words-
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the songs their minds were bleeding
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said things he thought absurd.
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'Surely, this is just a dream.'
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He couldn't be more wrong
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'If my friends were evil,
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I'd known it all along.
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I've known them all for ages.
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They wouldn't lie to me.'
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But their eyes would sink him
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into perplexity.
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He thought of forgiving them
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or regard them with disdain.
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But this much mutual hatred
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would drive anyone insane.
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He cut them from his presence
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and hid himself away,
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never to be seen again
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until a fated day.
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Till then he stayed in shadow,
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in his sanctum, out of sight.
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He spasmed in his anger.
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He winced away from light.
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Till then he dreamed of vengeance,
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violence, death and such.
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Talked and walked around, dreaming
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but never sleeping much.
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25 May 07


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Comments:

Some of the rhymes seem a little forced, almost to the extent of obscuring the meaning...and the tense seems to wander from present to past occasionally.
Otherwise...I like it!
 — Macbear73

Corrections made. Thanks!
 — jyce

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