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CARPET OF GRASS
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I’d like to fill my apartment with water
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and go swimming. For no reason at all,
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just to see what would float.  I bet
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there would be a big mess, considering
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all the tapestries which have never been washed.
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I could part the color-drenched water
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the way I have never parted the leaves
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of a Weeping Willow. I found a hidden cove
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once, behind a waterfall. Just big enough
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for two people to fit.
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Nevermind. I don’t want to fill my apartment
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with water and go swimming. I want to go
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on a hunger strike and have a bed-in.
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Just to see who would come over and visit.
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I’d probably have to go to the grocery store
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first, you cant have company without snacks.  
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I’d have to clean, too. I could be so hospitable
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that everyone would climb into bed for the cause.
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I think the cause should be something about whales,
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people love whales.
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Actually, I don’t want to go on a hunger strike
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or have a bed-in. I really want to rip up the carpet
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and plant grass, with some well places trees. I
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might need to call in a landscape architect. When
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I need to water the floor I’d set a small fire
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and let the sprinklers go off. I’d make sure no one knew
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we had sprinklers. Then I could invite them over,
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light a fire and get them to do a rain dance with me,
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and magically it would rain!
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I think I’d really love a carpet of grass.
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23 May 07

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velvet mmmmmm
 — zekejacobi

LOL hilarious
 — unknown

hahaha!  You need a tent, go live out in Nature until you get it out of your system or maybe you could make grass angels, like snow angels but without snow.

This is a very fun poem.  
 — Isabelle5

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