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Winter Willow
activism87

Coveted in the way
 1
that kids yearn to belong
 2
 
 
The willow sways
 3
tracing her hips
 4
swing baby swing
 5
 
 
Winter cold nips
 6
at the nape of her neck
 7
a beat flows strong
 8
 
 
the floor stands wrecked
 9
footwork beyond finesse
 10
each tap falling, a sting
 11
the willow branches slow caress
 12

20 May 07


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It's quite beautiful, but I feel there's no point to it. What is it trying to say, what exactly is it describing, what lies in between the lines? Is it just about a tree?
 — unknown

just comparing the movements of a dancer to the movements of a willow tree in the wind. Tried adding a little mingling of the two, although they are separate.
 — activism87

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