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Medicated Heaven
activism87

It takes more than an instance
 1
to lose it all, again
 2
 
 
Take these pills
 3
pills that won't let me feel
 4
little circles of godly power
 5
I ingest halos daily
 6
 
 
I died that night
 7
like so many have before
 8
I died today, unbeknownst to the world
 9
like so many will tomorrow
 10
 
 
Liquid happiness
 11
in bottles of hopelessness
 12
chemicals mingle in my stomach
 13
children playing red rover
 14
 
 
Dead
 15
no flash before my eyes
 16
just darkness
 17
the ever growing ever infinite
 18
darkness
 19
 
 
I ingest these angels
 20
they may free me one day
 21
until then, I take another
 22
and wait to live
 23

20 May 07

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i was attracted to this because of your title. i love this piece....and i'm not using the word 'love' loosely. i adore the emotions that you convey and how you convey them. if you decide to revise this i suggest looking over your puncuation (like trying to add more punctation to the end of your phrases), although your piece is impeccable without any revisions. nicely done. rock on.
 — lanezfairy

thanks for the comment and suggestion ill take into consideration. been a long time since i was last on here
 — activism87

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 — activism87

Line 1- instant you mean?

Line 7- which night? maybe you could say last night, or tonight.

Love line 14! very good image, it works.

the only other thing i might suggest is punctuation- but that's entirely up to you.
 — sunshinesgf

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