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It Wouldn't Torture Sisyphus
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A toad is held
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so shackled to his genes
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- his eyes so beaten
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to the shape of life -
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that if he squats
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with dead flies hung around him
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he will starve to death.
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It wouldn’t torture Sisyphus
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if he didn’t know
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the daily grind of flesh
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on stone
 11
on mountain
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cannot get him higher.
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We don’t see our stones.
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Today a fly brushed by my face
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with urgent and lustrating grace.
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It burred away and left my eyes
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unscaled - now I see my flies.
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19 May 07

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Must be a chuckles poem? "lustrating grace"?
The  poem has a great opening premise.  
S2 is fine also.  This is smart poem.
S3 loses me--I'm not getting the reason why/how
a metaphorical fly suddenly does all that.
BTW, the bufo toad will eat dead flies with relish all day long.
The title is good.  I confess (pardon this) that when the title first hit
my eyes, I read it as "My tortoise has syphilis" or something like that;
it was caught in the poem list (which is a list of flies, so to speak).
I think your poem has great merit.  I wonder if you can make S3 work better.

Cheers,
Reid
 — netskyIam

nice poem.
 — hank

I was the fly eaten by the frog eaten by the pike eaten by the fisherman.
This is delightful.
 — banditfemme

Very interesting and Unflat.  Also interesting subject very nicely connected to the toad and Sisyphus.  Good job.
 — Isabelle5

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