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Finding His Place in the Pack - For Vincent, aged 3

He trusts me so I practice patience
for his sake, listening as he scolds me
for nearly beating him in
this plastic Alligator game.
He is an alpha puppy in a world
currently much too big and busy
to bow down to his woof and whine.
We sort through piles of garden rock,
picking out rough topaz to keep
as pirate booty in our next adventure.
He looks nothing like his mother
but I find her own alpha spirit
in the purse of his lips,
in his struggle to dominate his world.
I let him win because I am a Beta mom;
I am comfortable in my place as second,
answering his howl for dominance
with only a small growl and a big kiss.

9 May 07

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  you should make this more lengthy and describe your kid...it would make a more interesting read....
 — juggalette69

I think I have the correct length and description for this particular poem.  Thank you for the read and the comment.  
 — Isabelle5

Juggalette, you have nothing to teach Isabelle. Her work is original, well-thought out and deep. Do not even try to criticize it here on PC.
 — unknown

Hey, thank you, but I'm here to learn, just like everyone else.  
 — Isabelle5

This is some cute stuff!  I LOVE in L13, "the purse of his lips."  Excellent little image and a sweet portrayal of how an adult can so easily become instantly childlike when in the presence of a child.  Nice writing.  Nice ending too!  I especially like the "little boyishness" of it all!  
 — unknown

Hi Isabelle

What can i say except a masterful poem full of insight and tenderness.

Larry beta dad Lark
 — larrylark

this is very sweet. lines 8-10 make me happy
 — adiscodancer

This is really lovely and very well written. I too have a 3 year old son and can totally relate!
 — icepineapple

The point of this pitifull site is to critique other's work - duh!
 — unknown

Dear Duh Unknown - your point is?
 — Isabelle5

isabelle5 , did you ever post
My mate?
i looked but could not find it .

I was not the rude unknown above
This is lovely .
 — unknown

I didn't post it but it would be in the running for shortest poem, don't you think?  I write about 20 more than I post, I think we all do.
 — Isabelle5

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