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Finding His Place in the Pack - For Vincent, aged 3
Isabelle5

He trusts me so I practice patience
 1
for his sake, listening as he scolds me
 2
for nearly beating him in
 3
this plastic Alligator game.
 4
 
 
He is an alpha puppy in a world
 5
currently much too big and busy
 6
to bow down to his woof and whine.
 7
 
 
We sort through piles of garden rock,
 8
picking out rough topaz to keep
 9
as pirate booty in our next adventure.
 10
 
 
He looks nothing like his mother
 11
but I find her own alpha spirit
 12
in the purse of his lips,
 13
in his struggle to dominate his world.
 14
 
 
I let him win because I am a Beta mom;
 15
I am comfortable in my place as second,
 16
answering his howl for dominance
 17
with only a small growl and a big kiss.
 18

9 May 07

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  you should make this more lengthy and describe your kid...it would make a more interesting read....
 — juggalette69

I think I have the correct length and description for this particular poem.  Thank you for the read and the comment.  
 — Isabelle5

Juggalette, you have nothing to teach Isabelle. Her work is original, well-thought out and deep. Do not even try to criticize it here on PC.
 — unknown

Hey, thank you, but I'm here to learn, just like everyone else.  
 — Isabelle5

This is some cute stuff!  I LOVE in L13, "the purse of his lips."  Excellent little image and a sweet portrayal of how an adult can so easily become instantly childlike when in the presence of a child.  Nice writing.  Nice ending too!  I especially like the "little boyishness" of it all!  
 — unknown

Hi Isabelle

What can i say except a masterful poem full of insight and tenderness.

Larry beta dad Lark
 — larrylark

this is very sweet. lines 8-10 make me happy
 — adiscodancer

This is really lovely and very well written. I too have a 3 year old son and can totally relate!
 — icepineapple

The point of this pitifull site is to critique other's work - duh!
 — unknown

Dear Duh Unknown - your point is?
 — Isabelle5

isabelle5 , did you ever post
My mate?
Primate.
i looked but could not find it .

I was not the rude unknown above
This is lovely .
 — unknown

I didn't post it but it would be in the running for shortest poem, don't you think?  I write about 20 more than I post, I think we all do.
 — Isabelle5

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