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i used to think anger was a weakness
unknown

the adults
 1
exploded
 2
over razor-nick
 3
trivialities.
 4
 
 
i couldn't understand
 5
i pegged it for
 6
a lack
 7
of class.
 8
 
 
then i came up against eight hour jobs
 9
sometimes twelve hours
 10
car needs an oil change
 11
a license plate
 12
the right colored sticker on the license plate
 13
or the cops will pull you over
 14
the tire is flat
 15
the lug-nut seized
 16
sump-pump backed up
 17
handle fell off the screen door
 18
lawn-mower needs a new spark-plug
 19
wife rides your ass for drinking
 20
and the mother in law pulls you aside at easter dinner
 21
gives you a failing grade.
 22
 
 
as the last few sparks of my solitude
 23
and individual magic
 24
were pecked and gnawed
 25
ground null
 26
by the vultures.
 27
 
 
as the oily fuckers
 28
of circumstance
 29
had me vice-tight
 30
by the nut-sack.
 31
 
 
i felt
 32
the paper dragon
 33
inside of me
 34
wanting to strike back.
 35
 
 
but i became
 36
a third generation
 37
alcoholic
 38
instead.
 39

5 May 07

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Wow.  Powerful.  I've heard it said there is a reason liquor is called 'spirits'.  Great writing and wonderful honesty.  Thanks for the read.
 — CervusWright

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