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Photography Rants
ducktape

and I'm just standing there
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hugging a complete stranger
 2
and I tell him, "It's so hard to let go."
 3
He tells me, "Then don't."
 4
 
 
in the dark room
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you don't see them
 6
you only feel them.
 7
he fell asleep next to me.
 8
 
 
my friend exclaims, "Look!  It's
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G-String Sonata!" and hands me a
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nude photography book.
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I look, laugh, and say "What a piece!"
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in the dark room
 13
you turn sort of sepia
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you use your eye muscles to turn
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yourself into a negative image.
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It's so hard to let go of those you love.
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It's like every moment you're
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not with them you are
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getting further apart and
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before you know it, you're hugging a complete stranger.
 21

4 May 07

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private life of troglodytes. probably have the radio on to FM Oldies.
 — unknown

I enjoyed this.  Especially lines 13-16.  I'm just kind a an imagery person.

And photograpy is, indeed, imagery.

-loves-
 — Aziel

sepia is beautiful
and so is this poem.

I'm taken with your
iconography

photography

and such.
 — banditfemme

13 - 16 are yes, great.
have to love it cause it's about photography,
but do not agree with lines 17 - 21 at all.
and didn't get 9 - 12.
 — photobooth

Lines 9-12 have to do with my "friend" who was looking at a nude photography book outside the darkroom, and he laughed at one of the photograph's titles, which was called "G-string Sonata."  The picture had a guy and a woman, and the guy was pulling down the woman's pants while she wrapped her arms around him, and she was wearing a G-string underneath.  The title is a pun, because a guitar has a G-string, and it is therefore associated with music.  I hope you get it now.

Why don't you agree with lines 17-21?  I'm interested.
Thanks for your comments.  I really appreciate them!  (;
 — ducktape

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