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Last Love
Isabelle5

I am a heartbeat
 1
caught under Love’s wing.
 2
Silence envelops
 3
rather than threatens
 4
and we are one wisp,
 5
floating on Time’s hand.
 6
 
 
I am a beam of light
 7
caught in a camera’s eye,
 8
breaking into rainbows
 9
on a drop of water.
 10
 
 
Here we are,
 11
caught under Life’s umbrella,
 12
both gripping the handle,
 13
both fighting the wind,
 14
 
 
concerned that should we
 15
get separated, nothing
 16
of us will survive
 17
 
 
but I am a heartbeat
 18
caught beneath your ribs.
 19
 
 
Where I go,
 20
you are my map.
 21
When you breathe,
 22
my lungs expand.
 23

4 May 07

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Really great. The last two lines are exceptional. My only suggestion would be to possibly rethink L20 & L21, as they are a bit too cliched for such a strong piece.
 — DrakeScott

Thanks, Drake.  I changed it a bit but still trying to find the perfect way to say it.  
 — unknown

please another romance novel creation by mother hen isabelle
 — unknown

well since it has my name... i have lost the right to go gaga over it... so i would simply appreciate the effort and i thank the author from the bottom of my heart.

Let the critics judge this heartfelt.
 — trochee

not the lungs expand
the clique expands
 — unknown

Jealousy, thy name is Unknown.
 — unknown

do not equate jealousy with amateur acts. and isabelle stop being unknown. i thought you had more pride than that. and yes more pride than me coz i m a jealous coward beating under a chicken wing blah blah
 — unknown

A poet can use Unknown any time without shame, what's your problem with that?
 — unknown

"nothing". i wanted isabelle to respond and she did.
 — unknown

But you're right, I don't have to hide behind anything.  If you can hear my voice without my name, that means I am authentic.  
 — Isabelle5

But you're wrong about me responding.  I didn't, only that last one.  
 — Isabelle5

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