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everyone's a cynic

It came in the form of how  
her words now ceased to fall  
-- unbidden  
       and uncontrolled --  
from tipped over tea kettles  
to the bottom of mouthfuls  
of soon to be overbrimming cups    
After the drinking deed was done  
-- dirtily dyed with tannin,  
     dizzily drunk off of theine --    
each cup would be held by the curved handle  
for the reading, keeping  
its round base close  
and warm to the palm      
There would be prophecies in the patterns  
formed by the scattered lexicon  
of boiled leaves; insight that  
astounded really  
when found      
I know she couldn’t have had  
swirled them on her own -  
not even if she’d tried      
Last I saw her she was doing just that  
-- reaching for her far-sighted glasses,  
     fiddling through her tight-knitted pockets --  
and I caught again the mutter she seems  
to have taken to of late:    
“There was a poem in here-  
I must have misplaced”    
That her old chatter-verse is lost  
is no call for tears  
    It would just fall on deaf ears

3 May 07

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the line breaks could do with a tweak, but it's rather nice otherwise.
 — unknown

:) Thank you.   Yes,I've re-edited this so many times for line-breaks... I'd be happy for any suggestions.
 — sggunal

--It would just fall
            ;          on deaf ears--

I like this a-lot   reminds me of my childhood  I found comfort in this read
 — unknown

although I don't know how that semi-colon got in there
 — unknown

Semicolons are sneaky that way.. :)  I did want the last line to be a bit discordant and off from the rest but I do like the suggestion too.. Will think about.  And I'm glad you could identify!
 — sggunal

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