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car full of chickenshit in front of me
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"sounds like you got big tits,
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gimme sixteen double cheese,
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make it twelve apple pies,
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wanna get run
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by a train?"
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lady in the headphones
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was either too polite
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or too scared
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to cut them at the knees.
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normally
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i'd have ridden it out
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as well,
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but that afternoon
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the boss had
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put me on notice
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for abusing sick time,
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and on top of that
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i'd made the mistake
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of answering my phone
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and the polite banker
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informed me
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they were starting
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foreclosure.
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i nudged the bumper
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of their rice-rocket
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and jammed my melon
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out the window,
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"the hummingbirds fly east
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in packs of ten gentleman,
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if you got more than bee-jizz in your heads
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i suggest
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you flutter in their wake."
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a tall cut
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of white ass-clown
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with a crooked straight-bill
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tore out of the driver's seat
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and came for me.
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i stomped out of my
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matchbox kia
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like a coked out
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rhinoceros.
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"BRING IT MOTHERFUCKER!"
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he 180'd.
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i grabbed his shirt collar
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through the window
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as he hit the gas.
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a chunk
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ripped off
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in my hand.
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i pulled into a space
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and sat
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until my arms
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stopped shaking
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and my lips
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no longer quivered.
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then i got out
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and impaled the thing
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on my antennae.
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what the hell is that?
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my wife asked
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the other day.
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keep that there baby,
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thats prima facie
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that the world
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ain't sucked out
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all my spirit
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just yet.
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28 Apr 07

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distinctively written. Wallop!
Everything about this works. Seamless, harsh, humourous and engaging.
Extraordinary line breaks. I'm tenning (10) this, but I'm not adding it to my favourites because I strongly suspect you were just very mean to me. But I'll probably reconsider. I have a very forgiving nature.

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You sure can write!
 — banditfemme

band,

thanks for reading.

justin.
 — unknown

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