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the camera smiles
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kodak moment:
 1
picket fence and green lawn
 2
a girl made of nerve gas
 3
in stockings and mary janes;
 4
 
 
her boy with perfectly parted hair
 5
and a kosher smile.
 6
the arm disappearing behind
 7
her waist suggests childish fingers
 8
have found the back of her pleated skirt
 9
to touch a fine-haired thigh.
 10
 
 
 
 
 
 
another box of sepia photography.
 11
the boy without his softer edges,
 12
traded for faded fatigues.
 13
he hunches alongside a dark korean woman;
 14
it feels like the mute tones have sucked
 15
the life from him but the smile
 16
is still kosher.
 17
 
 
 
 
 
 
the camera forgets his face
 18
for months, years
 19
distracted by a baby boy
 20
who will grow up homosexual
 21
and a girl that walks beneath
 22
red lights in manhattan.
 23
 
 
 
 
 
 
when the photos find him again,
 24
he is staring from unfamiliar windows
 25
with the rain pressing down,
 26
shadows licking his face, empty-eyed
 27
 
 
and i find the moment where the camera
 28
took his soul and brought it home.
 29

27 Apr 07


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Excellent poem
I'm not sure about L18 to 21, the stanza is like an appendage you don't really need
L28 a comma after moment?
or
and i find that moment where the camera
tok his soul and brought it home.

thanks for the read
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