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"alone in a dangerous world"
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“Alone in a Dangerous World”
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All alone, trapped in a world of despair, suffering, and constant angry voices,
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This girl, named Faith, never stops giving up hope or making good choices.
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She praises her Lord every day for still being alive,
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For in her particular type of world, it is rare that you survive.
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There is never any food on the table, nor clothes that have been washed,
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So when the other girls make fun of her, she feels trampled, saddened and squashed.
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Certainly there are no fancy music players, two click gadgets or even simple hugs,
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Her mother and father are too busy drinking and doing the drugs.
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The car engine stops, and doors slam open in a raging rush,
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There is no turning back, or else they will be hurled angrily into a corner and crushed.
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Saying the Lord’s Prayer over and over in her mind, Faith tries to hide by the stove.
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Her little brother Jackson is hiding by the bedroom, in a small alcove.
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A scream from her brother is heard, and blood is visible on his back.
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He bends over forward, though they are both used to the attacks.
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Bruises on his leg, cuts up her wrist,
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They feel so worthless, and from the wrath of their father, is what they try and resist.
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A couple of long years later, CPS came and these innocent children were put into a safe home.
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Never once did these well mannered kids whine, cry or moan.
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The past is unwoven by police, and their parents are in jail.
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Their father is in longer though, for trying to put the mother up for sale.
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Faith has kept strong, and is now a senior at U of L,
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Thankfully to the community of her neighborhood, who got her and Jackson out of that Hell.
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Jackson is a sophomore at UK, and he stays away from the drinking, drugs and pain,
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Because he saw how his parents morphed, and how he watched them become insane.
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This really sad story just goes to really show,
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That even when the going gets tough, at the end of the tunnel there will be a light; a glow.
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Get help if you need it, and always be strong,
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Because you just never know when it will be the end of your song.
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*realiistiic fiictiion;; anyy feedback would be appreciiatedd! thankss. :]

26 Apr 07


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