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In His Place
MelissaK

To dress in Black
 1
To don high heels
 2
To hear click-clock
 3
To pull on stockings
 4
To stride about
 5
To snap suspenders
 6
To do, not shout.
 7
To see submission in his eyes
 8
To tease and torture, tantalize
 9
To stalk my prey, by him unseen
 10
To swish that cane
 11
To hear him scream
 12
To bring him to that special place
 13
To do what I know I do best
 14
To be myself, still the unrest
 15
That lives in me, deep in my soul.
 16

14 Apr 07

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I'll put you in your place, bitch.
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Manhater
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This is not poetry.
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This sucks.
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WHAT?
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Shavedcunnie?
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Subject not proper. Structure is childish. Not good.
 — JerryReed

For once, I agree with Jerry.
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SHIT. Like what inutile writes.
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Melissa is probably inutile's "girl"
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I like it. I like the structure and sequence. I like the wording. I like the language. Good poem.
 — hairlesscunn

Hairlesscunn will give you a blowjob.
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To be repetitive.
Seriously, you've got to cut down on that repetition.
 — FangzOfFire

The repitition is what makes this particular poem. Pay no attention to Fangz
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Makes it a poorly written poem, you mean.
 — FangzOfFire

Do you have a way I can contact you LOL A real power poem.

Larry hit me with your rhythm stick Lark
 — larrylark

I like how you start each sentence with the word two. But you should have done it all the way. Beginning the last sentence with the word that does not fit.
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want to screw?
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WOW

Highly charged and do you charge?

Larry expense account Lark
 — larrylark

No charge, Larry.
 — MelissaK

too too too too many toos - duh duh duh = are yu fur real dingbat
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The to's are need, dumbshit. I see nothing wrong with this poem, except I am not into BD.
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Melissa wants to fuck larrylark
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What posseses someone to write something like this?
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