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In His Place

To dress in Black
To don high heels
To hear click-clock
To pull on stockings
To stride about
To snap suspenders
To do, not shout.
To see submission in his eyes
To tease and torture, tantalize
To stalk my prey, by him unseen
To swish that cane
To hear him scream
To bring him to that special place
To do what I know I do best
To be myself, still the unrest
That lives in me, deep in my soul.

14 Apr 07

Rated 6.5 (7.3) by 4 users.
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I'll put you in your place, bitch.
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This is not poetry.
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This sucks.
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Subject not proper. Structure is childish. Not good.
 — JerryReed

For once, I agree with Jerry.
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SHIT. Like what inutile writes.
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Melissa is probably inutile's "girl"
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I like it. I like the structure and sequence. I like the wording. I like the language. Good poem.
 — hairlesscunn

Hairlesscunn will give you a blowjob.
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To be repetitive.
Seriously, you've got to cut down on that repetition.
 — FangzOfFire

The repitition is what makes this particular poem. Pay no attention to Fangz
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Makes it a poorly written poem, you mean.
 — FangzOfFire

Do you have a way I can contact you LOL A real power poem.

Larry hit me with your rhythm stick Lark
 — larrylark

I like how you start each sentence with the word two. But you should have done it all the way. Beginning the last sentence with the word that does not fit.
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want to screw?
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Highly charged and do you charge?

Larry expense account Lark
 — larrylark

No charge, Larry.
 — MelissaK

too too too too many toos - duh duh duh = are yu fur real dingbat
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The to's are need, dumbshit. I see nothing wrong with this poem, except I am not into BD.
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Melissa wants to fuck larrylark
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What posseses someone to write something like this?
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