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Angela
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soft prayer ascend
 1
to blazing heavens
 2
as if risen awkward
 3
to trail through dawn's
 4
shadey fog
 5
it rotates beyond pure
 6
as the glide practises
 7
on its havoc night
 8
 
 
parting dawn's clover
 9
sweet bee fest and feast
 10
lost in raw nerves
 11
of fire like that
 12
extreme bench upheld
 13
no sorrowful wrong
 14
but answers alive
 15
and it quoted angel
 16
saying "you are quick"
 17
 
 
and into the colour of need
 18
the past trims the rough
 19
the mansion figures
 20
all blissful antics
 21
despite a void not empty
 22

26 Mar 07


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Another attempt at no punctuation.

Another failure, in my opinion.

Line 1 - soft prayer ascends or soft prayers ascend - choose one.  The way you have it is not correct.
What does 'rotates beyond pure' mean?

This is a little obscure, a lot of emotion and words without a clear point to focus on.
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