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Peas and Cues
thebroadset

Valued skin like silk, valued sweat like spice.
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There are ancient roads paved in grape seeds,
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they just sought their home
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and I’d like to tell them that one day
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home will be a hotel
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and solace will be found inside themselves.
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New boats, with maps laid out on sawdust stuck tables
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race their compasses in a magnetized spin for fame.
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I would like to tell them
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that the stars were beautiful before they told them where to go.
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Now someone who knows the tides
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is telling me about a metaphor
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as if their explorations were something beyond mine.
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He called the North Star Shakespeare
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but I call it equally beautiful to the rest.
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Forgoing life to crawl under a chapter,
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I sat on a beach chair and sketched out Kim’s hair.
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Forgoing understanding for the idea that life
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is what I make it and I make it perfect.
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22 Mar 07

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This is very good.  Very, very good.  I even checked the spelling of forgoing and found it could be that way or foregoing.  Nice job, Poet.  This is so romantic and soft.
 — Isabelle5

Excellence before my eyes.  Awesome writing.  :-)
 — starr

really nice piece. at first the first line stopped me, but as soon as i got to

and I’d like to tell them that one day  
home will be a hotel
and solace will be found inside themselves

i was hooked. went back and read it a few times. aloud. you have a magnificent voice.  looking forward to reading more.

thanks
i
 — ilenelush

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