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Dreams of the Milky Way
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my chair whizzes
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around a massive star
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that struts through fields
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of radiant gravity.
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In a sparkling montage
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a boat of stars
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straddles a dark blue ocean
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of matter and antimatter
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that quarrel everyday-
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like bush and bin laden
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and their petty fights;
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their wmd's and bombs
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dwarf alongside starry clusters
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of nebulous explosions
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and dancing quasars.
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this pale blue dot
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an emerald ocean of life
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among a dead neighborhood,
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flirting with the immense
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above
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and beyond.
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22 Mar 07

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Fantastic Poem.

I love l6-7.

l12 - what is wmd?
 — PollyReg

Thank you! :)

wmd= weapons of mass destruction. :P
 — unknown

NICE, different topic, and good use of expressions.
 — unknown

yes, i agree. very nice.
 — listen

hmmmmm
verycosmicalyes

just the problems of my eye:

L6,7 a boat straddles (?)
L10-12 (ugh. not a damned political statement poem?)
L13 dwarf along (dwarf as a verb is fine, but what is dwarfed, here? and dwarf "along" makes absolutely no sense to me)
L16 blue (short poem, please don't repeat)
L17 ocean (short poem, please don't repeat)
L19 immensity (clunky word. consider simply immense)

goodbye  
 — unknown

Thanks, have made some changes.
 — unknown

quasars and their morse codes..
 — unknown

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