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dislocation
unknown

In anytown state
 1
proud daddy sr
 2
kneels down
 3
without hesitation
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on an overpopulated
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street -
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diverts traffic
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(unapologetically) -
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& inflates
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3 frenzied
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beaming cubs
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with boastfilled
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bear hugs.
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Fareez and daughter
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slip awkwardly by.
 15
He is too buzy
 16
to calculate it will take
 17
three generations
 18
before his family will even
 19
approximate that
 20
degree of social comfort.
 21
Amritha, is buzy looking
 22
back with 7 year old
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tourist eyes, and aches
 24
for a time when
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her father's homeland breath
 26
might transform into a
 27
boastful hug.
 28

21 Mar 07


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Wow, I want to come and read this again! It's neat, but I have a meeting and no time to comment!
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wrote this after seeing 'namesake'
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