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Hope
ursutherngrl

Move on
 1
Let go
 2
Just get it out of your head
 3
How do I do this
 4
How do I move on
 5
I fell in love with him so long ago
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The day we first met I knew he was special
 7
Smiles an laughter made everyday better
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And as we grew older the closer me an him would get
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Something inside me decided to let him go
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But in my heart he was still there
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I told him I needed a break
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But soon we would be back strong
 13
But I waited an waited
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I made him wait to long
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Now hes gone
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And I cant move on
 17
How can I move on
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from the only one I have ever loved
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So long ago when we first fell in love
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But yet its so fresh in my mind
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Now after the mistakes I have made
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I regret my choices
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All I want is to turn
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Turn back the hands of time
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All of it was infront of me
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So obvious
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The right choice was there
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But instead I took him for granted
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I expected him to  always be there
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To wait an wait for me
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So now what I did to him he is doing to me
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Too little too late is what he said
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But that is a concept I can’t grasp
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I love him with everything I have
 35
I want him back in my life no matter the task
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So now with a heart shattered I have lost my soulmate
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He was MY REASON for the smiles on my face
 38
Without him in my life in my heart is an empty space
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So I will wait for him as he did for me
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All I can do is hope
 41
Wait
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For him to come back to me
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my first one so don't be to harsh..

18 Mar 07


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well i love this one. reminds me of a break up i just had
 — unknown

honestly it sounds like you should as a wise man once said "let it burn" bitch
 — unknown

fuck that shit it makes me want to vomit blood
 — unknown

vomit blood? wow thats kinda weird
 — ursutherngrl

I personally like it. It reminds me of a pet that i once had. Yes, old Scrappy Doo and I used to spend hours on the basketball court just laying there gazing into the clouds marveling at their beauty. Of course that was before he hanged himself by the net. But oh yea the poem was good too.



            ;          &nbs p;          &nb sp;          R.I.P. Scrappy Doo
 — unknown

fuckin yeah, it's that intense. also it's depressing, get this shit off of here.
 — unknown

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