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handcrafted
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a first draft of a first poem in ages, all comments/feedback, improvement tips etc...welcomed. thanks.

hands that have worked look beautiful to me
 1
(you know -
 2
hands with the nails that were meant to be...)
 3
 
 
hands that have lines poets could recite
 4
 
 
hands that have caressed and comforted through the night
 5
 
 
hands that have scars etched by hard won battles
 6
 
 
hands that have lived decades on from rattles
 7
 
 
hands that have clenched making fists of power
 8
 
 
hands that have survived chains in our darkest hour
 9
 
 
hands that have played with sisters and brothers
 10
 
 
hands that have clapped in support of others
 11
 
 
hands that have prayed for humanity
 12
 
 
hands that have worked look beautiful to me.
 13

18 Mar 07


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