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Onslaught
chuckles

Through blackened sky the blazing missiles fly;
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projectiles screaming down to pound our shield.
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The raging sound can't drown our battle cry:
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"We'll never yield! We'll never cede this field!"
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Our precious tract attacked, by fate begrudged.
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We'll not go back, we stand where strength has stood.
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Our valour born of soil and sweat: a sludge;
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a thick and ruddy mud of earth and blood.
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We fend off every brutal salvo thrown
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by nature's forces; we are not coerced.
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Entrenched until the firestorm has blown,
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enduring 'til that bitch has done its worst.
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Engaged armada in a sea of shells,
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our unit floats a lake of mortar swells.
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16 Mar 07

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such perfect timing
(in more ways than one).
 — unknown

your rhythm is real good, real good.


how about

'We will never yield, never cede this field!'

same with line 6

We will not go back, and stand where strength has stood.

what itched was 'bitch'. is all.

nice, nice poem.
 — varun

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