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'Two thirds of what you see
 1
occurs behind your eyes.'
 2
She wears gloves whenever
 3
she needs to sleep.
 4


Old Chinese Proverb modified

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15 Mar 07

Rated 9 (9) by 2 users.
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wise man say wear gloves or u ll get stinky finger
 — unknown

I don't get it...
:'(
 — wendz

latex can palliate  a filthy mind
 — unknown

nice poem.
 — varun

wendz, i'd say it means

we all live
in
and with
our own
obsessions

?
 — varun

though, i think it might be better to relate the proverb to do something with sight, like a direct derivation? but that's the first thought you must have had.
this works well, because i explain it as 'the mind's eye'. and so it works very well perhaps...

thanks.
 — varun

varun is correct.
 — unknown

the disorder is primarily mental in origin requiring treatment of the exterior.
 — unknown

yay
 — varun

rejoice varun.

this is nice. i especially like lines 3 and 4. nothing more to add really.
8/10
eso
 — Esoteric

Ooh, I get it. Nice! I initially was looking for the connection between discrimination and the gloves, and just couldn't figure anything except for "blind hands" :S

Tre cool pome.
 — wendz

i will. i am. -ing that is...
 — varun

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