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What I would do...
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what would i do with one more day,
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many people would ask god for forgivness
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or try and change the world
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me, well I'd go hiking one last time with
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my brother, or go hunting with my dad
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just to see if he really does have
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the better shot. I'd bake one more cake
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with my grandma-just to make sure
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i have the recipe down. I'd go
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drink a few beers with my best friends,
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take pictures we were always too
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embarrassed to take, i'd go kiss that boy
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in fifth grade that i
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always meant to. I'd go shopping
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and spend money that i will never
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need, i'd say 'hello ma'am' or
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'mister' to every person i met on
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the street. I would light off fireworks,
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play one more game of basketball, drive
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a four-wheeler, go through town with my
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horn blaring, dance in the rain, i would
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go a day without shaving my legs
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and why...because life deserves to be celebrated.
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yes, every one of us would love to go back
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in time to that one moment where
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we took the left instead of the right,
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where we missed our train for sucess,
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but celebrate! Accept the wrongs and dance
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for your faults and challenges...because
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we've only really be given
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just one more day!
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7 Mar 07

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good. it reminds me of a 60 year old man i work with who's never experienced the little things
 — starwars

i had to come back to this, is it not sad that even though after reading this poem, most of us will go back on the street with our ghostly expressions, and not say a word, just live on emotionless, and all of this, just to remain in our comfort zones.
 — starwars

Punctuation!!!  Do you have one more day or are you going back in time?  You can't kiss the boy in 5th grade unless you go back in time and then it's not just one day, you're looking at years back.

Which is it?  Please create some white space in this, for the reader's sake.  Spell check would be helpful, too.  

I like the idea, just not the presentation.

  
 — Isabelle5

i really really love this poem, don't even listen to the comment before this, you did such a great job! The dynamics of going through one more day is great!
 — unknown

Excuse me, I commented because I think it would help the poem be better.
 — Isabelle5

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