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Red Snow
Fallen

Parachute-less high above the earth,
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I watch a snowflake fall,
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and this is how it happens.
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Tiny snowflake forms within a cloud,
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so frail, I thought it would fall apart,
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my heart yearns for snowflake.
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As I, gliding down with it peered,
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its inner beauty,
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the yellow sun behind.
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Snowflake Multicolor radiance,
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like diamond brillance,
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kaleidoscopic lightbeams.
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O how I love you snowflake,
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so perfect, intricate, etheral,
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I will lie down with you.
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As I plummet to the gound, I see snowflake,
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gently touching others, becoming snow.
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My life blood covers the winter scene.
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4 Mar 07

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tell me this is a joke.

better yet. eat shit and die.
 — bologna

bologna,

The poem is a kind of macabre joke on everyone's life, but I know that is not the intention of your words, but you were not too far off and as to the second piece of constructive criticism, we all do.

I am honored to have you comment on my poem. You are making yourself a huge reputation on this site, infamous as you know. I am more bothered by your troubled self than with your comments. I wish you well and hope that whatever it is that is bothering you will be resolved within yourself.
 — Fallen

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