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Sunday Bloody Sunday
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You dont even have to read it.
Who will read it.
I needed to get it out.
The feeling makes it worth something
Not the way it flows
The rythm.
I hate it when people write just for the ratings.
I love to impress.
I'm tired of trying lately.
The end.


Taking Back Sunday.
 1
Can I take it...can i take it back?
 2
Can I take back the smoke filled room
 3
Where you slept
 4
And i lie awake.
 5
Your questioning my face staring into the mirror
 6
Across from the bed.
 7
My reflection.
 8
Who am I again?
 9
Who are you?
 10
Why are you here?
 11
Why am I?
 12
Why is that boy sitting in that chair
 13
Smoking away his health
 14
Why are there people in the bed next to us.
 15
Why are they under the covers together when
 16
They just met.
 17
Why does she make me feel guilty for
 18
Not being a person of lesser value
 19
Why do you make me feel guilty
 20
For not being her
 21
Why are you telling me to lay back down
 22
When you cant even sit up
 23
These words come out like vomit
 24
From last nights addictions
 25
I'm saying things but theyre never really sounds
 26
Where are these thoughts going?
 27
My feelings, I've been thinking
 28
It hurts me thinking
 29
Maybe you dont really
 30
Maybe I shouldnt even
 31
Care.
 32
 
 
My worst has always brought out the best in you.
 33
 
 
When I break promises.
 34
You always want me more.
 35
When I start new habits that take out the meaning in life
 36
Stop telling me how proud.
 37
When I cry and you actually reciprocate
 38
When I yell and you finally listen.
 39
 
 
 
 
Why not when I'm being beautiful?
 40
Why does that make you fall apart
 41
Why dont you ask me to stop ripping myself apart
 42
Why dont you say you love the way I help people
 43
Why dont you admire my good intentions
 44
 
 
 
 
Babe.
 45
This time.
 46
Its you.
 47
 
 
I need you,
 48
You need to.
 49
Change for the better.
 50
Instead of bringing out the worst in me.
 51
 
 
 
 
What makes me better than everyone else
 52
Makes you
 53
Jealous.
 54
 
 
Poems Ryhme.
 55
I've broken rules.
 56
I've got a story.
 57
The ratings on this one
 58
Dont go so high.
 59
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
So i'm taking back sunday.
 60
The day
 61
You took away
 62
The meaning behind
 63
My name.
 64

3 Mar 07


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The song is better.



Hell, even George Bush singing the song is better.
 — Bombazine

i like this alot
 — unknown

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