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When Judy Disappeared
quelyn

My parents said
 1
they didn't know
 2
why Judy disappeared
 3
 
 
and I thought
 4
she had moved away
 5
when Judy disappeared
 6
 
 
I was told
 7
to stay at home
 8
find somewhere else to play
 9
 
 
don't ask
 10
all those questions
 11
she'll come back someday
 12
 
 
But I wondered
 13
why the silence
 14
when her father disappeared
 15
 
 
and I wondered
 16
what was prison
 17
and how long was 30 years
 18
 
 
and I wondered
 19
why was incest
 20
a word I shouldn't hear
 21
 
 
and I wished
 22
I could ask Judy
 23
but she had disappeared.
 24

3 Mar 07


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Comments:

The form of three lines per stanza made the poem a little harder to read.

There is a lot of repetition ("I wondered", "she disappeared"). I would enjoy a shorter concise form.

You specify incest on L20, but state your parents didn't tell you anything in S1, so how did you find out? Perhaps describing the conversation you overheard (or however you learned the truth) would pull together the details better.

Good description and subject.
 — rocket

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