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sedated once again
trafalgore

Drop dead
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in the bare-walled room of
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the happy man.
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I walked by to find you
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chattering away
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like a bride before a ceremony.
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After all of the rituals we performed
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in silence.
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Now you are committed.
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The cold hands that held you
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were not mine.
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So I burst forth
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with my childrens rhymes
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and innocent intentions
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to convince you.
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Everything is easier
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when the hope is gone.
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1 Mar 07

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I like this poem. i'd like it more if i understood it, even so, i'm pretty sure you don't need L18 or 19
 — unknown

This really is very, very good.

I'm not keen on lines 5 and 6 (I don't know why, it seems a little like a sore thumb)

But otherwise excellent
 — PollyReg

Thanks for the comments. 18 and 19 did have to go. I'm not sure about 5 and 6.
 — trafalgore

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