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Side A
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hard time frames each soft emotion
 1
I don’t sugar coat hoarfrost     I deep freeze  
 2
up/tight un-sweet heart shoots coarse
 3
blanket statements aimed to please
 4
like minded spit ball pitchers
 5
 
 
onlookers sweat Caveat Lector
 6
demolition shapes the prose
 7
 
 
life/death scenes set to words  
 8
march out line by line by snap lines
 9
set to dead level a spiked strewn past    
 10
smart remarks sibilantly  hiss
 11
better pissed off than on endings
 12
come easy like [         ]
 13
metaphor
 14
 
 
My center piece is set to rock steady
 15
no skipped heart-beats recorded
 16
 
 
I should have left the equalizer alone
 17
side B flips me
 18
over
 19
 
 
inside out……
 20

27 Feb 07

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My center piece is set to rock steady  15
no skipped heart-beats recorded  16
    
I should have left the equalizer alone  17
side B flips me  18
over  19
    
inside out……


haha, awesome.  i like that as you read through this piece you think you are going in one direction when suddenly your mind gets jerked into another.  you can hardly catch your breath.  effective.
 — pyrrhonian

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