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do not open until 2085
electricvish

why am i smiling? (big smile, huge smile)
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if i could explain the reason in thirteen thousand words or less
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[and those thirteen thousand words not including the likes of “stellar, spiritual, rocked, glorious, epiphanic / epiphimatic, or fuckin’ A,]
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i would be onto something
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something, however, not
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so
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big:
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nobody reads (much less pays for) poetry, anyways
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can you see that?
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the way we’ve all been washed away.
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the trees are huge stalks of wheat, and we are silhouette
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[each face: a solar eclipse]
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{can i send a video telegraph?}
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“do not open until 2085.”
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-and there we are again:
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it’s much warmer than it should be,
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or was, at least
 17
we have our sweatshirts, and the songs and the chants and that damn good feeling of four cheeseburgers
 18
(off the grill from under the tent) washed down with keystone light
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(from the cooler in the back of the truck)
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that sun. that sun i expect to see anywhere else, but here
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it’s an emo album cover, it’s a promo poster, it’s the shot in that finale elegante (with that guy that acts quasi . . . french)
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it’s that sun. it’s there. turn around and look.
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as the pale yellow turns golden turns scarlet
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and fields of grains turn to rows of cars and red dixie cups and charcoal spent
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it’s an instance, past
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so call me up in 2085
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and if you ask me again,
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maybe i’ll have a one-hundred-one word deposition
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(but if you’re around too,
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you’ll know
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you’ll know far better than me)
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on what it’s like to be there.
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24 Feb 07


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