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wife says i can't be drunk at 11:30 in the morning

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is that written	1
in some book of consequence?	2
or did oprah squeeze another edict	3
from her cavernous	4
hatchet-wound?	5

you're scaring me justin,	6
this is disgusting,	7
look at yourself!	8
this has to stop.	9

no, no baby,	10
you don't understand,	11
this fortifies me against the boogeyman	12
and other limitations	13
of circumstance.	14

she slams the door	15
in my face	16
and stomps away.	17

i fling it open	18
charge after her,	19

come here baby!	20
i'll slam it up your ass	21
and make things copacetic.	22
i'll even plow	23
your root	24
with my tongue.	25

she starts shaking	26
and crying	27
on the bed.	28

i hold my junk	29
in my hand	30
and point it at her face	31
bam! pow! zap!	32
see baby!	33
he's hungry,	34
ready to fire!	35

she sprints from the room	36
grabs my son	37
and they disappear	38
out the front door.	39

i flip a new bottle	40
and stand at the window.	41

the sun	42
is mid sky,	43

stench of a thousand	44
dead civilizations	45
upon me	46

and i feel	47
the ancient urge	48
to gore a bitch	49
more understanding	50
than my wife.	51

24 Feb 07

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i need some to think up a proper comment after reading this four times.
— WordsAndMe

wow you really let rip, but in an intelliigent and understandable manner. I know the feeling you describe. Thank you for posting.
— unknown

i've been there and done it, so by that i have proven your title wrong. as for the poem, i simply didn't get why half of the words were needed. far too excessive.
— Esoteric

no doze d.
— unknown

this is crap
— Mongrol

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