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A chance encounter with a sunset.
Bees

A chance encounter
 1
 
 
with a sunset
 2
 
 
leaves her knee scorched
 3
 
 
on grey stone
 4
 
 
masquerading as a delightful yellow.
 5
 
 
Scarlet races
 6
through the air,
 7
 
 
into the house,
 8
 
 
streaming through the windows
 9
 
 
so glassy, seeming as though they're
 10
at the brink of tear.
 11

19 Feb 07

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i do like this - its both gentle and full of desire and want - there is something of the glory of the sky at sunset too

i can almost feel her flight and panic - lines 6 to 11 are wonderful

beautifully done

added to faves / given 10 :)
 — Mongrol

Thank you. :)
 — Bees

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