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Perfect Sin
starr

No angel
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will speak of what we did
 2
and what it was:
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a perfect sin.
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A perfect time
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to be close again,
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I was still a child
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in your embrace;
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tongue's wet texture,
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indigo,
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perfect moment,
 11
perfect place.
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Your mother
 13
should have known
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the perverted thoughts that filled your head.
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Not her "precious middle son,"
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yet it was me in your hot bed.
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Easy lay, easy prey-
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I was born by your sister;
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the same blood flowed within
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as we shared a best kept secret,
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something sacred between kin
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and no angel
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will speak of
 24
what we did.
 25
 
 
I played with matches too
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as a kid.
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17 Feb 07

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wow, intense. 8/10. nicely done.
 — Unbelievable

You did an excellent job conveying your points throughout the poem, while leaving a necessary amount of ambiguity to keep it mysterious and intriguing.

very good.
 — wanderlusted

Thanks "Unbelievable" and "wanderlusted."  Yeah...DEFINITELY one of my personal favorites despite the very dark tones.  
 — starr

That's lovely.
 — shallee

Thanks, "shallee!"  :-)
 — starr

What in the name of William H. Macy was your mother's maiden name? 6/10
 — Henry

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